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1、高考作文满分标准+ 写人记叙文（上） 高考 八大满分评分标准 1.覆盖全部要点- 2 结构合理 2.结构合理- 3.详略得当- 4 过渡自然 4.过渡自然- 5.高级词汇- 6 复杂句式 6.复杂句式- 7.语法正确- 8.合理想象- 1何为结构合理： (2006湖北)受某英文报的委托，你最近对高中生的英语阅读兴趣做 了 一 次调查 。 请根据以下信息 用英语为该报写 一 篇100 词左右的 了次 调 查 。 请根据以下信息 ， 用英语为该报写 篇100 词左右的 短文。短文的标题及首句已为你写好。 调查内容：在新闻、故事、科普、学习方法四种英文文章中，学生 最喜欢哪一种 调查范围：湖北省的1

2、0 所中学 查对象 高中生 调 查对象 ：高中生 调查人数：1,000 调查方式 访谈 调查方式 ：访谈 调查结果：( 见下图) 05全国卷 假设你是李华，最近国内一家英文报纸正在讨论北京动物园是 否应迁出市区。以下是你所在班级讨论的情况。请你给该报写 封信 反映讨论结果 一 封信 ， 反映讨论结果 。 赞成迁出： 1 游客多 交通堵塞 1. 游客多 ，交通堵塞 2. 郊区环境好 反对迁出： 1. 建于1906 年，中外闻名 2. 搬迁易造成动物死亡 2详略得当 (2005) 美国中学生Jeff将要来你所在的红星中学学习中文，经协商安排住在你家 。假设你是李华，请给Jeff写一封信，按照下图顺

3、序介绍他来中国后的生活安排 过渡自然 假设近日你在网上参加了一场关于高考英语是否应该一年多考的讨 论 们对此见解 请根据 表 提 英篇 稿 件 简 论 ，人 们对此见解 不一。 请根据 下表提 示，用 英语写一 篇稿件 ， 简 述两种观点并表明你的态度。 3高考常考题材: 第二节 书面表达 （满分25 分 ）(2007 年全国卷) 第二节 书面表达 （满分25 分 ）(2007 年全国卷) 假定你是李华，希望通过外籍教师Peter 找一个英语笔友。请写一封短信 描述 一 下你理想中笔友的条件 并说明为什么选这样的笔友 。 具体条 ， 描述 下你理想中笔友的条件 ，并说明为什么选这样的笔友 。

4、具体条 件包括： 年龄 ； 年龄 ； 性别； 爱好 （旅游 、 运动 、宠物等 ）。 爱好 （旅游 、 运动 、宠物等 ）。 注意：1 词数100 左右； 2 可以适当增加细节 以使行文连贯 ； 2 可以适当增加细节 ， 以使行文连贯 ； 3 开头语已为你写好。 Dear Peter Dear Peter, I am writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor. Model: 满分范文素材 Wh I b t d i t iddl h l th I When I began studying at my middle school t

5、hree years ago, I was introduced to Sara Smith, the schools headmistress. H t d f i dl i d lik h Her smart appearance and warm, friendly expression made me like her immediately. She is a small-boned, smiling woman in her early fifties, with twinkling blue eyes and soft, silver curls. Although she dr

6、esses with twinkling blue eyes and soft, silver curls. Although she dresses simply, she always manages to look elegant. She is a very fair-minded person who treats everyone at the school with y py equal respect. Despite clasping ( 攥紧)her hands nervously when she is upset, she is usually very calm, w

7、hich is shown by her ability to keep her temper in the most difficult situations. Her quiet voice and gentle, caring manner make her popular with the children. Ms Smith had no children of her own; however, she says that she feels lik th f th hild i h h l I f t h h ti f like a mother of the children

8、in her school. In fact, she has no time for family life, since she dedicates her life to her job. Besides taking care of various administrative(管理的) tasks every day she always takes time various administrative(管理的) tasks every day, she always takes time to talk to the teachers and parents. To my min

9、d, Sara Smith is a dedicated professional who is a wonderful To my mind, Sara Smith is a dedicated professional who is a wonderful role model, not only for the children but also for the teachers as well. 4Describing a Person 掌握五大常见写作技法： 定语从句 追加说明 因果 因果 转折 举例 举例 structure Introduction: Main body Main

10、 body Conclusion Introduction: 1) Who the person is 2) How/Where did you know him 第一段模板： 第一段模板：framework framework When I began studying at my middle school three years ago, I was introduced to Sara Smith, the schools headmistress. When I years ago, I was introduced to Sara Smith, When I moved to th

11、e new neighborhood 6 years ago, I was introduced to Mr Smith, a carpenter living opposite to my house Main body 1. physical appearance 2. personalities 2. personalities 3. lifestyle conclusion Feelings about the person Feelings about the person Structure: 第一段 ： who the person is 第一段 ： who the person

12、 is how you first met him 第二段 ： physical appearance (general specific) 第二段 ： physical appearance (general-specific) 第三段： personalities(thesis-proof) 第四段 lif t l (h bit /i t t /j b /b li f 第四段 ： lifestyle(habits/interests/jobs/beliefs 第五段： comments/feelings about the person 时态 活人现在 死人过去 时态-活人现在 ； 死人过

13、去 5Physical Appearance 如何生动地描写外貌 重点句型 重点句型1 1： ：Have A,B and C Have A,B and C A (broad, hooked, flat) Nose X (bloodshot twinkling sunken protruding) eyes X (bloodshot, twinkling, sunken, protruding) eyes A (clean-shaven, tanned, fine-featured) face X (silver blonde receding curly) hair X (silver, bl

14、onde, receding, curly) hair A (athletic, portly, average, slender) build X (f i th ) Ski X (fair, swarthy) Skin A (warm, friendly, hostile, amusing) expression Jobs has a hooked nose, fair skin and sunken eyes. The boy has a flat nose thick eyebrows and a happy and amusing The boy has a flat nose, t

15、hick eyebrows and a happy and amusing expression ： ： Have A,B and C Have A,B and C A (broad hooked flat) Nose A (broad, hooked, flat) Nose X (bloodshot, twinkling, sunken,protruding) eyes A (clean-shaven tanned fine-featured) face A (clean-shaven, tanned, fine-featured) face X (silver, blonde, reced

16、ing, curly) hair A (athletic, portly, average, slender) build A (athletic, portly, average, slender) build X (fair, swarthy) Skin A (warm, friendly, hostile,amusing) expression (,y , ,g ) p 黄金句型： The girl is tall and slim. She has an average build, a hooked nose and a fine-featured face. She has an

17、average build, a hooked nose and a fine featured face. The girl is tall and slim, with an average build, a hooked nose and a fine featured face. 描写顺序 描写顺序 ： 总原则 ： 从 一 般 到 具体 总原则 ： 从 般 到 具体 1）长相，年龄，服装，身材 2 ） 鼻子 眼睛 头发 面庞 2 ） 鼻子，眼睛 ， 头发 ，面庞 6例如： who is in his early twenties ， is quite tall and well-bui

18、lt ， with thick black hair and blue eyes Bill Bill, with thick black hair and blue eyes. （一般）她是一个20 出头的美丽的女孩大概 She is a gorgeous girl in her early twenties. （具体）她有着运动员的身材，白皙的皮肤和金色的长发 She has an athletic build, fair skin and straight blonde hair. She is a gorgeous girl in her early twenties ， an athl

19、etic build, fair skin and straight blonde hair. She has He is short and medium-weight. He has blond hair, twinkling blue eyes and a happy expression. 重点句型2 ： 熟练运用 定语从句 定语从句: :who whose which who whose which 熟练运用 定语从句 定语从句: :who,whose,which who,whose,which My neighbor is slightly eccentric . He has d

20、ozens of filthy cats. My neighbor, who has dozens of cats, is slightly eccentric. My neighbor, who has dozens of cats, is slightly eccentric. Si i She is tall and slim. She has an average build, a hooked nose and straight blonde hair. To m, who is unattractive but smart and who likes playing footbal

21、l very ,p y g y much, is a tall and slim boy Tom is a tall and slim boy He is unattractive but smart He likes playing football very much 71) My little brother is a naughty child. 2) Ml ilb hlh l d i 2) My little brothers clothes are always dirty. My little brother is a naughty child whose clothes ar

22、e always dirty. y My P.E. teacher has strong arms. That makes him look like a boxer. He has strong arms, which makes him look like a boxer 练习： Kiit l l Kevin is very tall. Kevin is athletic. Kevin plays basketball for our school team. . This makes him an excellent player. Kevin is very tall and and

23、athletic, who who plays basketball for our school team, which which makes him an excellent player. 重点句型3 ：学会制造矛盾冲突 1）but,yet,however,nevertheless 2）although/though/even though (if)/while 3）i it f/d it 3）in spite of/despite HH is fat I like her very much 请用who;which;despite The postman is 56 The post

24、man is 56. He has thick black hair Hh t hk i He has swarthy skin This makes him look younger than he is He works from 5 to 10 every day He loves his profession Mrs Li is very short and slim Mrs Li is very short and slim. Her flat is next to mine Sh h hit h i She has white hair She has deep wrinkles She is already in her late nineties. She is always dressed in a red sweater 8